aloft July 12, 2017 upon a mountain we sat souls dug in good upright still as statues while smoke & hot valley whispers tangoed up tripping wild as lightning we stayed as they smothered us & prayed for them to cover us Share Get link Facebook Twitter Pinterest Email Other Apps Share Get link Facebook Twitter Pinterest Email Other Apps Comments ThotpurgeJuly 12, 2017 at 10:21 AMsouls dug in... love that!ReplyDeleteRepliesReplyUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 10:27 AMThank you! Just read yours as well but was unable to comment. We can never truly go home, can we? Beautifully bittersweetReplyDeleteRepliesReplyindybevJuly 12, 2017 at 2:55 PM... "wild as lightning" ... a nice phrase. ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 4:56 PMThank you, indybevDeleteRepliesReplyReplyBuddah MoskowitzJuly 12, 2017 at 4:08 PMExcellent - so brief but very descriptive. I love the sweep of the words here. ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 4:56 PMThank you for finding your way back here.DeleteRepliesReplyReplySherry Blue SkyJuly 12, 2017 at 4:23 PMI like the souls dug in line so much. As I read, I am thinking of the wildfires, the lightning, "smoke and hot valley whispers."ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 4:57 PMThank you, SherryDeleteRepliesReplyReplySusanJuly 12, 2017 at 6:55 PMMaybe humans are the only natural thing that can be so still. And nature moves on.ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 10:56 PMThe stillness is an illusion...maybeDeleteRepliesReplyReplyOld EggJuly 12, 2017 at 8:29 PM"Good upright still as statues" yet "smoke and hot valley whispers were welcomed"? There seems to be an anomaly there or perhaps you are implying that there is no way to escape the downside of the world even if we try! ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 10:58 PMExactly. It takes superhuman strength to not just give in or give upDeleteRepliesReplyReplySumana RoyJuly 12, 2017 at 10:52 PMLove the contrast: 'souls dug in' & 'smoke / & hot valley / whispers / tangoed up'...ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 12, 2017 at 10:58 PMThank you, SumanaDeleteRepliesReplyReplyMarjaJuly 13, 2017 at 1:26 AM"wild as lightningwe stayedas they smothered us"very intriguing It feels like wanting to give in to temptationsReplyDeleteRepliesReplyJae RoseJuly 13, 2017 at 2:00 AMI love the easy flow of this ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 13, 2017 at 10:16 AMThank you, JaeDeleteRepliesReplyReplyMaryJuly 13, 2017 at 5:58 PMNice - this is a meditation (of sorts). I can picture the scene.ReplyDeleteRepliesUnknownJuly 13, 2017 at 8:09 PMThank you for reading, Mary. I'm glad you liked itDeleteRepliesReplyReplyAdd commentLoad more... Post a Comment Please drop a penny in a poet's hat :
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souls dug in... love that!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Just read yours as well but was unable to comment. We can never truly go home, can we? Beautifully bittersweet
ReplyDelete... "wild as lightning" ... a nice phrase.
ReplyDeleteThank you, indybev
DeleteExcellent - so brief but very descriptive. I love the sweep of the words here.
ReplyDeleteThank you for finding your way back here.
DeleteI like the souls dug in line so much. As I read, I am thinking of the wildfires, the lightning, "smoke and hot valley whispers."
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sherry
DeleteMaybe humans are the only natural thing that can be so still. And nature moves on.
ReplyDeleteThe stillness is an illusion...maybe
Delete"Good upright still as statues" yet "smoke and hot valley whispers were welcomed"? There seems to be an anomaly there or perhaps you are implying that there is no way to escape the downside of the world even if we try!
ReplyDeleteExactly. It takes superhuman strength to not just give in or give up
DeleteLove the contrast: 'souls dug in' & 'smoke / & hot valley / whispers / tangoed up'...
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sumana
Delete"wild as lightning
ReplyDeletewe stayed
as they
smothered us"
very intriguing It feels like wanting to give in to temptations
I love the easy flow of this
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jae
DeleteNice - this is a meditation (of sorts). I can picture the scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading, Mary. I'm glad you liked it
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