"Good upright still as statues" yet "smoke and hot valley whispers were welcomed"? There seems to be an anomaly there or perhaps you are implying that there is no way to escape the downside of the world even if we try!
she's still not over the fact that she is under the ground she speaks in rattly, clattery hissing voices whenever they come around "I'll reach right up and turn your ankles you unforgivable gits, for burying me, prematurely, over a spell of the coughing fits" so angry with her new residence and bored a deeper shade of blue she's knocked over her marble marker and broken it clean in two. Boo! ~ Rene 2010 To join Magpie Tales click HERE For another take on this magpie please check out "The Song Of The Stone Healer"
this is the story of a girl who lived in the basement of the girl next door sheltered in the confines of a suburban tract house dungeon; her punishment for runnin' wild with dreams half unlatched she ran like a spirit in the night from those badlands wind blowin' through her hair shielding her eyes from the blinding light she hugged onto a shoreline of hope someday soon, she's not sure when her savior will rise up from the streets with an armload of rain soaked roses and second chances Rene ~ 2010 Click Here to join Magpie Tales creative writing group .
souls dug in... love that!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Just read yours as well but was unable to comment. We can never truly go home, can we? Beautifully bittersweet
ReplyDelete... "wild as lightning" ... a nice phrase.
ReplyDeleteThank you, indybev
DeleteExcellent - so brief but very descriptive. I love the sweep of the words here.
ReplyDeleteThank you for finding your way back here.
DeleteI like the souls dug in line so much. As I read, I am thinking of the wildfires, the lightning, "smoke and hot valley whispers."
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sherry
DeleteMaybe humans are the only natural thing that can be so still. And nature moves on.
ReplyDeleteThe stillness is an illusion...maybe
Delete"Good upright still as statues" yet "smoke and hot valley whispers were welcomed"? There seems to be an anomaly there or perhaps you are implying that there is no way to escape the downside of the world even if we try!
ReplyDeleteExactly. It takes superhuman strength to not just give in or give up
DeleteLove the contrast: 'souls dug in' & 'smoke / & hot valley / whispers / tangoed up'...
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sumana
Delete"wild as lightning
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very intriguing It feels like wanting to give in to temptations
I love the easy flow of this
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jae
DeleteNice - this is a meditation (of sorts). I can picture the scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading, Mary. I'm glad you liked it
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