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she's still
not over the fact
that
she is under the ground
she speaks
in rattly, clatteryhissing voices
whenever they come around
"I'll reach right up
and turn your ankles
you unforgivable gits, for burying me, prematurely, over a spell of the coughing fits"
so angry with her new residence
and bored a deeper shade of blue
Boo! ~ Rene 2010
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not over the fact
that
she is under the ground
she speaks
in rattly, clatteryhissing voices
whenever they come around
"I'll reach right up
and turn your ankles
you unforgivable gits, for burying me, prematurely, over a spell of the coughing fits"
so angry with her new residence
and bored a deeper shade of blue
she's knocked over her marble marker
and broken it clean in two.
Boo! ~ Rene 2010
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For another take on this magpie please check out
"The Song Of The Stone Healer"
holy snap...dont want to get it her way right now...yikes! deliciously creepy...lol.
ReplyDeleteWell, Happy Halloween! Much cheerier than "The Long Black Veil". I likey!
ReplyDeleteOh, this is absolutely delightful. I just love your sparky sense of humor in this one!
ReplyDeleteGumby:
ReplyDeleteNobody knows, nobody sees..nobody knows but me..
Ha! So clever! Love it.
ReplyDeleteWell, this was REALLY fun. I needed this tonight! (One can't take life - and death - too seriously sometime!)
ReplyDeleteMade me laugh. "Turning a deeper shade of blue" Got the blues?.
ReplyDeleteBoo! Very cute!
ReplyDeleteOh my god! That was so cool! (Do I sound as mature as I am?) I loved it. So cool...
ReplyDeleteOooh, another scary take on it? "Bored a deeper shade of blue" is hilarious, however, you unforgivable git. LOL
ReplyDeletecreeeepy!
ReplyDeleteexcellent
ReplyDeleteWow, the Hateful Dead.
ReplyDeleteAs you probably know, people used to be afraid of being buried prematirely, and there were coffins with little bells on them and things like that, just in case. But this chick's dead as anything and doesn't know it. Bummer, lol. Really well written, Rene. I loved this.
Wonderful take on the Mag. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteI love it Rene. You're quite witty, aintcha? Hehehe
ReplyDeleteFun and cool! Thanks-
ReplyDeleteA angry corpse in denial! Love it! "she speaks in rattly, clattery hissing voices whenever they come around..." What an image!
ReplyDeleteOooo, I have shivers down my spine on that one. FUN, Rene!
ReplyDeleteOh you scary Rene! Funny and creepy mag!
ReplyDeleteThere should be lurid drawings in blues and purples accompanying this. :-)
ReplyDeletePearl
I've heard tales of those buried alive, back in the day when they didn't understand about comas, and such. Creepy!
ReplyDeleteA subconscious fear for many of us!
ReplyDeleteYou're not kidding, BOO!
oh hahah so very clever- I love a spirit with Spirit!
ReplyDeleteHahah!
ReplyDeleteBest Halloween take I've seen yet.
What a great spin on the prompt.
ReplyDelete'unforgivable git's'......brilliant!
Love this !!!
ReplyDeleteI thought this was so funny. I think if we had known each other in life, she would not have been an easy person to know. She would no doubt dislike me for not taking her seriously.
ReplyDeleteWowe! An angry ghost!
ReplyDeleteThey really thought she'd been iced
And buried her deep in a thrice!
But up from the ground
Her ghost came around,
A really pissed off poltergeist!
Thanks for that bright flash of humour, Rene. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI'd be more than slightlyhacked off too! Lovely post!
ReplyDeleteAwesome. I'm going to post Keats' "This Living Hand" because of you.
ReplyDeleteThis living hand, now warm and capable
Of earnest grasping, would, if it were cold
And in the icy silence of the tomb,
So haunt thy days and chill thy dreaming nights
That thou would wish thine own heart dry of blood
So in my veins red life might stream again,
And thou be conscience-calmed-- see here it is--
I hold it towards you.
Incredibly funny! Love it!
ReplyDeletenicely done rene. may be the only one i've read from the perspective of the dead.
ReplyDeleteI love what you did with the prompt Rene...well done! ;-)_
ReplyDeletewohoooo... loved your prompt..i actually had been wondering on the same lines myself, but u did it full justice
ReplyDeleteSometimes the dead just won't lay down, will they?
ReplyDeleteFull marks for finding some humour in this grusome topic!
ReplyDeleteLovely and well written
ReplyDeleteHalloween is coming, the ghosties and ghoulies are rising from their graves.
ReplyDeleteLove it! Humor found in darkness, reaching up to get the gits. Nice.
ReplyDeleteHilarious, clever, and at this time of year, creepily believable - woo- ooo - ooo- ooh!
ReplyDeleteThe rhyme was subtle and didn't seem to control the poem, which allowed the spirit of the dead to have her say.
Excellent use of photo prompt, I loved it!
Terrific - love the voice of 'her'!
ReplyDeleteKeats really could get his creep on, couldn't he Fred!
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone...have a wicked all Hallow's Eve
ReplyDeleteu r an expert in writing spooky pieces.
ReplyDeletewell done.
Well, "Boo!" right back at ya, and thank you for this special Halloween Magpie!
ReplyDeleteword verification is "tesse" .... is she announcing her name from her grave?!!!!!
awesome! Wouldn't want to walk over her grave!
ReplyDeleteOh my! Everyone would do well to stay away from that grave.
ReplyDeleteHAhah. I shouldn't laugh I suppose but I love this little bit of morbid whimsy.
ReplyDeleteMmm...it's perfectly fine to laugh, this was meant to be humorous, albiet darkly :)
ReplyDeleteThe last lines are the best. I like the humor mixed with creepiness.
ReplyDeleteOoh, that's a feisty one, glad I wasn't the one to bury her prematurely...
ReplyDeletelove it...creepy in a good way;)
ReplyDeleteoooo,so Halloweeny! love it
ReplyDeleteWhat a fascinating take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteGreat scary Halloween write!
ReplyDeleteThat was a really dirty trick they played on her. Pun intended.
ReplyDeleteHappy Halloween!
Victoria
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Dear Rene
ReplyDeleteA very nice one. "Bored a deeper shade of blue"... very well said.. Thanks for sharing..
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Om Namah Shivaya
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Thanks for linking, remarkable job.
ReplyDeleteHappy November.
yuks! creepy! my heart cant take it!
ReplyDeleteI'd be a bit ticked-off at being buried alive too!
ReplyDeleteNice Potluck entry!
That was really creepy! Fun, fun, fun not in the sun! Enjoyed that one a lot!
ReplyDeleteomg Rene that is BRILLIANT. Holy crap!!! I love it!
ReplyDeleteLove this -- I just hear her anger clattering in that grave!
ReplyDeletespooky!!! it made me think of my grandma (she used to threatened us that she will comeback as an angry spirit to pull our feet at night for being so naughty with her!) Luckily, so far, no pulls ;)
ReplyDeleteThis was a fun read! It's like one of those funny/scary stories I used to see on TV when I still watched TV. Nice! :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful, wonderful and even more wonderful!!!!
ReplyDeleteOuch!! Not a very pretty story for her..
ReplyDeleteAnd it scared the hell outta me!!
She really should quit bothering us innocent souls though.. :)
Enjoyed the read!! Creepy..but awesome!
I really love your blog!
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