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speak
in a low
house voice

leave me
unquiet, silently 
undone

2015-Rene

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  1. "Leave me unquiet." Interesting juxtaposition.

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  2. there is a nice intimacy to this....
    whisper to me....undo me...

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  3. There is an intimacy in a whisper... the undone would come for sure.

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  4. Oh! Quiet, silently undone. I get it!

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  5. You REALLY manage to write a tight poem in a few lines. Still thinking a bit about 'unquiet' and 'undone.' Nice to see you again!

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  6. Oh yes, the secret is always best kept within one's whisper.

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  7. Powerful and in just a few words. My kind of poem.

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  8. Sometimes we need to be able to go through the undone moments alone so as to be able to move on.

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  9. soft steamy passion… love this!

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  10. Oh, the unquiet and undone say so much in so few lines. Nice to see you, Rene.

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  11. Yup to all the above--tight write! smiles to you!

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  12. Loved the whisper of 'unquiet' which is leaving it 'undone'... :-)

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  13. There's a lovely understatement to this piece.

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  14. That touch of serenity.............

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  15. I like the hushed image house voice conjures...

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