Perfect
lovely.
"Leave me unquiet." Interesting juxtaposition.
the storm under the radar.
there is a nice intimacy to this....whisper to me....undo me...
love this !!
There is an intimacy in a whisper... the undone would come for sure.
Shhh..... love it.
Oh! Quiet, silently undone. I get it!
You REALLY manage to write a tight poem in a few lines. Still thinking a bit about 'unquiet' and 'undone.' Nice to see you again!
love this....whispering..x
Oh yes, the secret is always best kept within one's whisper.
Powerful and in just a few words. My kind of poem.
Sometimes we need to be able to go through the undone moments alone so as to be able to move on.
soft steamy passion… love this!
Oh, the unquiet and undone say so much in so few lines. Nice to see you, Rene.
Yup to all the above--tight write! smiles to you!
Feels. . . timely.
Loved the whisper of 'unquiet' which is leaving it 'undone'... :-)
Perfect. Not a word wasted.
fantastic.
Very sensual and subtle. Nice! :-))
There's a lovely understatement to this piece.
..and all will be well!
That touch of serenity.............
Delightful
I like the hushed image house voice conjures...
This really has a beautiful power to it...
Please drop a penny in a poet's hat :
Perfect
ReplyDeletelovely.
ReplyDelete"Leave me unquiet." Interesting juxtaposition.
ReplyDeletethe storm under the radar.
Deletethere is a nice intimacy to this....
ReplyDeletewhisper to me....undo me...
love this !!
ReplyDeleteThere is an intimacy in a whisper... the undone would come for sure.
ReplyDeleteShhh..... love it.
ReplyDeleteOh! Quiet, silently undone. I get it!
ReplyDeleteYou REALLY manage to write a tight poem in a few lines. Still thinking a bit about 'unquiet' and 'undone.' Nice to see you again!
ReplyDeletelove this....whispering..x
ReplyDeleteOh yes, the secret is always best kept within one's whisper.
ReplyDeletePowerful and in just a few words. My kind of poem.
ReplyDeleteSometimes we need to be able to go through the undone moments alone so as to be able to move on.
ReplyDeletesoft steamy passion… love this!
ReplyDeleteOh, the unquiet and undone say so much in so few lines. Nice to see you, Rene.
ReplyDeleteYup to all the above--tight write! smiles to you!
ReplyDeleteFeels. . . timely.
ReplyDeleteLoved the whisper of 'unquiet' which is leaving it 'undone'... :-)
ReplyDeletePerfect. Not a word wasted.
ReplyDeletefantastic.
ReplyDeleteVery sensual and subtle. Nice! :-))
ReplyDeleteThere's a lovely understatement to this piece.
ReplyDelete..and all will be well!
ReplyDeleteThat touch of serenity.............
ReplyDeleteDelightful
ReplyDeleteI like the hushed image house voice conjures...
ReplyDeleteThis really has a beautiful power to it...
ReplyDelete