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you caught
the stars left handed
tossed 'em back
eyes twinkling
before the sun realized
they were gone
blowing
out your fingers
like candles & cracking jokes
(so i wouldn't worry)
you couldn't hide
what you were
2015-Rene
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i agree with the last two lines. we just can't hide what we are
ReplyDeleteI like this person you are writing about :)
ReplyDeletethe last two lines are very truthful.
ReplyDeleteThere's much truth to see behind closed eyelids...
ReplyDeleteExcellent! Can't help thinking the left hand a brilliant choice since all we see in the photo is the right hand.
ReplyDelete"May she be in heaven a good half hour before the devil knows shes dead !"
ReplyDeleteThis is the best thing I've read in a dog's age. The catching the stars left handed really grabbed me, and then the whole rest of the poem lived up to the start.
ReplyDeleteThat first line is steller Rene!!! An amazing write!
ReplyDeleteTossing the stars back - beautifully written lines.
ReplyDeleteSo true, even the unseeing eye, sees!
ReplyDeleteLove! Love! Love this! Short and to the point. No waste. No haste. Just right.
ReplyDeleteno point in hiding! Excellent!
ReplyDeleteArresting images.
ReplyDeleteLove the notion of blowing out fingers like candles...wow...
ReplyDeleteNone of us can, I guess. Well done.
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Great story--I'd like to read more about the character. :)
ReplyDeleteWell done, indeed. I am left wanting more.
ReplyDeleteOne can only pretend to someone else for some time but not all the time.
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