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Image via Magpie Tales

you caught
the stars left handed
tossed 'em back
eyes twinkling
before the sun realized
they were gone

blowing
out your fingers
like candles & cracking jokes
(so i wouldn't worry)
you couldn't hide
what you were

2015-Rene

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  1. SuyashJJanuary 25, 2015 at 10:41 PM

    i agree with the last two lines. we just can't hide what we are

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  2. Maria MaineroJanuary 26, 2015 at 1:29 AM

    I like this person you are writing about :)

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  3. NatašekJanuary 26, 2015 at 4:05 AM

    the last two lines are very truthful.

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  4. JinksyJanuary 26, 2015 at 4:54 AM

    There's much truth to see behind closed eyelids...

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  5. SusanJanuary 26, 2015 at 5:56 AM

    Excellent! Can't help thinking the left hand a brilliant choice since all we see in the photo is the right hand.

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  6. Silent Otto January 26, 2015 at 7:02 AM

    "May she be in heaven a good half hour before the devil knows shes dead !"

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  7. FireblossomJanuary 26, 2015 at 1:07 PM

    This is the best thing I've read in a dog's age. The catching the stars left handed really grabbed me, and then the whole rest of the poem lived up to the start.

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  8. Carrie Van HornJanuary 26, 2015 at 2:56 PM

    That first line is steller Rene!!! An amazing write!

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  9. BerowneJanuary 26, 2015 at 3:32 PM

    Tossing the stars back - beautifully written lines.

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  10. 21 WitsJanuary 26, 2015 at 6:51 PM

    So true, even the unseeing eye, sees!

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  11. UnknownJanuary 26, 2015 at 8:06 PM

    Love! Love! Love this! Short and to the point. No waste. No haste. Just right.

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  12. Kathe W.January 26, 2015 at 10:34 PM

    no point in hiding! Excellent!

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  13. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 27, 2015 at 1:30 AM

    Arresting images.

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  14. Tess KincaidJanuary 27, 2015 at 3:10 PM

    Love the notion of blowing out fingers like candles...wow...

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  15. Susan AndersonJanuary 28, 2015 at 4:22 PM

    None of us can, I guess. Well done.

    =)

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  16. C. SandlinJanuary 30, 2015 at 2:57 PM

    Great story--I'd like to read more about the character. :)

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  17. GailFebruary 15, 2015 at 2:45 PM

    Well done, indeed. I am left wanting more.

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  18. Vandana SharmaMarch 8, 2015 at 2:12 PM

    One can only pretend to someone else for some time but not all the time.

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