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strange garden

if i only knew
where he went
i'd go and fetch him
throwin' im
over me back
dancing
all the way home

this
is the strangest
garden
a place to blossom
without root
a place for flight
without wings

so easy
to get carried away
talking about the beauty
of where we all end up
instead of living
making
the most of where we start


Rene ~ March 2012

For Magpie Tales
Image by Uzengia Alexsander Nedic
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  1. Brian MillerMarch 11, 2012 at 10:18 PM

    intriguing write rene...the first two stanza dance really well...the third threw me a bit with the introduction of him...my initial assumption is a play of the where we start in the second...i may be wrong though...

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  2. Tess KincaidMarch 11, 2012 at 10:27 PM

    Here's to making the most of where we start...

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  3. S.E.IngrahamMarch 11, 2012 at 11:47 PM

    very cool take, unique ... not what I was expecting at all

    http://aleapingelephant.blogspot.com/2012/03/in-dawn.html

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  4. Irish GumboMarch 12, 2012 at 6:35 AM

    Sometimes, it is because of where we start that we truly appreciate the beauty of where we end up.

    Sometimes.

    You made me think.

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  5. PearlMarch 12, 2012 at 10:54 AM

    Ahh. That last stanza... The path of my life: to learn to appreciate where I am rather than wishing myself elsewhere...

    Pearl

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  6. HelenMarch 12, 2012 at 12:59 PM

    I feel the dance, love when you use dialect .. great Mag!!

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  7. Susan AndersonMarch 12, 2012 at 3:23 PM

    An interesting take, and I like your message too.

    =)

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  8. Buddah MoskowitzMarch 12, 2012 at 5:14 PM

    Wonderful fun - unraveling this poem. Spilled out effortlessly and beautifully.

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  9. Carrie Van HornMarch 12, 2012 at 6:56 PM

    That last line is killer Rene! Love this! ;-)

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  10. Crystal PistolMarch 13, 2012 at 3:08 AM

    I so wish I could write poetry as well as you do. I wouldn't even know where to start. Well done!

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  11. ClaudiaMarch 13, 2012 at 6:02 PM

    smiles...i like...
    a place to blossom
    without root
    a place for flight
    without wings... a strange garden indeed...a magical one as well..

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  12. author.nara.maloneMarch 13, 2012 at 6:12 PM

    sounds like wisdom grows in your garden. enjoyed this.

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  13. Laurie KolpMarch 13, 2012 at 6:37 PM

    Powerful and very true... great ending.

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  14. Jannie FunsterMarch 13, 2012 at 10:26 PM

    A very wise garden indeed, I am all for living now too.

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  15. hyperCRYPTICalMarch 14, 2012 at 3:26 PM

    Excellent write - love the last line!

    Anna :o]

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  16. AnonymousMarch 14, 2012 at 4:01 PM

    unique intriguing piece with nice language

    depth of field

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  17. MichaelMarch 17, 2012 at 12:47 PM

    Love the way you end that, Rene. Brilliant.

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  18. Tumblewords:March 17, 2012 at 1:20 PM

    Would that we all had a wise garden. Nice work!

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