River, Marina Moevs, 2005 Inspired? Check out Magpie Tales |
going down
to the river
to the river
to pray
gonna build me
gonna build me
a fortress
gonna get
gonna get
the hell away
getting my
getting my
ass off the grid
getting it
getting it
good and hid
no i ain't
no i ain't
going down
to the river
to the river
to pray
i ain't
i ain't
going down
to wait
to wait
for no king
it's live free
it's live free
or die here
all
all
or nothing
all i'm
all i'm
serving is fish
it ain't
it ain't
on no silver dish
no i ain't
going down
to wait
to wait
for no king
i ain't
i ain't
going down
to the river to cry
to the river to cry
left my
lover in the city
didn't even
didn't even
say goodbye
pulled the
pulled the
wool off my head
found i
found i
was almost dead
no i ain't
no i ain't
going down
to the river
to the river
to cry
and i ain't
and i ain't
going back
to the city
to die
Rene ~
move beyond that river, terrific Magpie
ReplyDeletethere are certainly many that die in the city...and aint waiting on no one...the day is here....the day has come
ReplyDeleteRivers are eccentric that way- they don't seem to mind if we arrive with nothing to say at all. No tears left to cry, empty hands and a list of what we will not, cannot do- the river takes it all. Washes it. Us.
ReplyDeletesad, powerful words.
ReplyDeletecheers.
Talk about a declaration of independence and truth! You nailed this one, Rene. I appreciate the way you fully developed the character of one who lives off the grid.
ReplyDeleteQuite interesting approach, successfully pulled off...
ReplyDeleteWowzers, this is wicked good!
ReplyDeleteLove this!!!
ReplyDeleteRene, I cant find a place to email you in here. Would you please e me at WildWoman2@shaw.ca? Thanks, kiddo.
ReplyDeletesing it! i wanna hear you sing it.
ReplyDeletei love the way you started it... and flow... and powerful ending...
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
You tell, Rene! Great fun.
ReplyDeleteI started to hi-light my favorite passage but found myself almost hi-lighting the whole thing. The attitude and passion just flows from this. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteand I aint going back...says it all
ReplyDeletemany times...very effectivly
the words had teeth
nice
Rene, you totally nailed it .. knocked it out of the ballpark!
ReplyDeletestrong, strong words...well written..x
ReplyDeleteVery good. Terse and uncompromising.
ReplyDeleteAs always, you cut it to the bone.
ReplyDeleteGreat riff on "Down to the river to pray", keeping to the simplicity and edge of that era, with a life atilt and plenty of firewood on the shore.
ReplyDeleteI can imagine you reading or even singing this. I like the brave voice, specially the last line.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece ~
oh Lord I love this.
ReplyDeleteLOVE IT.
You have such a raw and fresh talent Rene!! Love this! :-)
ReplyDeleteThe voice says it all. What a great pic to inspire you too.
ReplyDeletenice - I like the dialect to this one.
ReplyDeleteI love your dialect pieces, Rene...this one is begging for some music...so spiritual...
ReplyDeletePowerful piece! I love it -
ReplyDeleteI am so glad Casey Freeland shared this on facebook. You are amazingly talented.
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