Image via Magpie Tales i won't be leaving here with you nor will you be staying with me for any longer than you see fit that is just the way of it it is the silent refrain of my being i won't be leaving here with you but i will stay, until my time is done as your ceremonial chosen one no, this won't be my last tour though it is the first time i won't be leaving here with you shh, now, darling. this is what i do i see it in your eyes, our time's drawing to a close. please don't mind the tears they come, they go, it's true... i won't be leaving here with you Rene ~ December 8, 2012
The briefness of the poem actually add more content.. the last line is perfect here.
ReplyDeletei agree, the last line is perfect :)
ReplyDeleteAlot of depth and impact in your poem! Inspired... !!
ReplyDeleteThis is an effective poem that really makes me think.... We all should have a river to transport us to the other side of a catastrophe, I think.
ReplyDeleteI admire that carving of the river ~
ReplyDeleteOh how I love this. Every perfect word.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful economy of words to convey so much!
ReplyDeletePerfection and I agree the end is wonderful!
ReplyDeletelovely tribute
ReplyDelete...and life is so worth living.
ReplyDeleteLovely!
ReplyDeleteNice, succinct, and says it all in a few lines
ReplyDeleteWow, say it like it is!
ReplyDeleteIt's also very effective reading it from the last line to the first.
ReplyDeleteHandy things , rivers , you can move along them ....
ReplyDeleteA certain write and a comforting thought
ReplyDeleteOoh. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteEverything diminishes with the right company. Indigo x
ReplyDeletedelicious!!
ReplyDeleteShort and succinct! I like it. It's sweet.
ReplyDeleteSharp and short and clever; well done.
ReplyDeleteHmmmm!
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i like this so much
ReplyDeletegreat use of the river in this verse - real strength in each word
ReplyDeletethat´s human!
ReplyDeleteI love this...
ReplyDeleteRene...one of my next books is entitled A River Runs Through Me: Outer Trauma | Inner Healing...I need this poem in the first page....xoxoxo
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