Image via Magpie Tales i won't be leaving here with you nor will you be staying with me for any longer than you see fit that is just the way of it it is the silent refrain of my being i won't be leaving here with you but i will stay, until my time is done as your ceremonial chosen one no, this won't be my last tour though it is the first time i won't be leaving here with you shh, now, darling. this is what i do i see it in your eyes, our time's drawing to a close. please don't mind the tears they come, they go, it's true... i won't be leaving here with you Rene ~ December 8, 2012
I love how you use the stanza about pouring creamer into coffee to create just the right atmosphere for your big reveal.
ReplyDeletePortent and atmosphere - you nailed it!
ReplyDelete"a lighter shade of resignation"...becomes so significant...nice lines..
ReplyDeletePerfect,
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...
ReplyDeleteOh this is really sad . . .
ReplyDeleteThings that mean the most and are closest to our heart as well as truth - are the ones we leave unspoken. Beautifully penned. Great work with the prompt.
ReplyDeleteHeartfelt indeed.
ReplyDeleteI loved this, partly because it's a horribly recognisable situation, when we can't say what we really need to. Lovely imagery, moving from the coffee to the clouds to her exhalation.
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"a lighter shade of resignation "
ReplyDeleteWish I'd thought of that: such a fine phrase.
Feeling a bit stuck is not good. Great write!
ReplyDeletei ate this up.
ReplyDeletei just seem to be
a bit stuck
And the lighter shade of resignation?
brilliance.
Mastery of words - magic :-)
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