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damn fine writing


i want to feel it

the ink on your pen

scratching

rough thoughts

on smooth surfaces

i want to smell it

where your mind has been

the brew

of conquest 

and raging desire

i want to see it

what you’ve made of

your world

bleeding out

from every damn word

i want to taste it

what that
kiss was like

and how
 you felt

when it wasn’t yours

i want to hear it

the clash of swords 

the war

hard fought

the territory won



Rene ~ 2013

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  1. Brian MillerAugust 20, 2013 at 4:06 PM

    let me experience what you have, when you put pen to paper....make me feel it, smell it....and want to escape or roll in it...smiles.

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  2. PearlAugust 20, 2013 at 4:08 PM

    :-) Big smiles to you, Rene. THIS is the reason I read.

    Pearl

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  3. Indigo RothAugust 20, 2013 at 4:09 PM

    Lovely Rene, really lovely.

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  4. author.nara.maloneAugust 20, 2013 at 6:18 PM

    It is a war getting words on a page, a battle won line by line. Love this.

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  5. AnonymousAugust 20, 2013 at 6:55 PM

    Really digging this.

    The third verse is just so good.

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  6. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerAugust 20, 2013 at 8:20 PM

    i want to taste it

    what that
    kiss was like

    and how
 you felt

    when it wasn’t yours


    This stanza just really speaks to me!

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  7. UnknownAugust 20, 2013 at 9:08 PM

    A sensual extravaganza of want and need and relationship. Clever, Rene!!!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/08/20/transformation-2/

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  8. Mike SutcliffeAugust 21, 2013 at 10:27 AM

    I really love this ~ how the mind leaks thoughts and creations ~ thank you.

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  9. Dorianna (paintswithwords)August 22, 2013 at 9:45 AM

    Enjoyed the feel of this..what every write should do..make you feel, taste, hear and experience and share the pain, joy, conquests..well done

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  10. Buddah MoskowitzAugust 22, 2013 at 7:10 PM

    Excellent! This really excited me! Let me be you for a moment!

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