unsprung
kick the bars down
set on fire the grey sails
scream technicolor,wake the skies
riot bright
Rene ~ March 14, 2013
For d'Verse Poets Pub - Form For All~Cinquain
kick the bars down
set on fire the grey sails
scream technicolor,wake the skies
riot bright
Rene ~ March 14, 2013
For d'Verse Poets Pub - Form For All~Cinquain
scream technicolor wake the sky...haha i like line...think i might drop a comma or some punctuation in the middle of it...unless you meant it one thought...i read two there though...i like the intensity though in it...
ReplyDeletecome on spring!
vernal... what a cool word. I'm ready for technicolor... plan on driving further south in a few weeks... perhaps Charleston, SC. :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome cinquain! It's calling spring out to dance!
ReplyDeleteKind of a kick a$$ voice. Very confident and sure. I liked the voice and presentation alot. Very well work with the form.
ReplyDeleteI love 'the grey riot' ...and the colors that get unsprung..:)
ReplyDelete..scream technicolor, wake the sky turn bright --- ha, now that's vernal.... great take... smiles...
ReplyDeleteYou show 'em. Go get those clouds!
ReplyDeleteThat's what we all long for, scream technicolor.
ReplyDeleteWow, that says it.
ReplyDeleteVernal is right.
ReplyDeleteShared this on FB. You knock me out, man.
Pearl
scream technicolor... that's great, Rene
ReplyDeleteRene, that's the way to deal with winter - a technicolour scream :-) Fabulous inages and use of the cinquain form.
ReplyDeleteMmmmm- lovin' this!
ReplyDelete"riot bright" you sound like my kind of person. :) we should all riot bright! x
ReplyDeleteWe are having a raging snowstorm here right now.
ReplyDeleteAnd I'm pissed.
Oh yea all the energy and protestation is shown here
ReplyDeleteGreat cinquain. Enjoyed the burst of color!
ReplyDeleteFantastic, profane and enlivening ! Red !
ReplyDeleteLoudly.
ReplyDeleteFreely.
Deeply.
Do it.