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Sunday, January 6, 2013

virgin

Image (via Magpie Tales) by Daniel Murtagh


to watch her slip into
the silken night 
longing diaphanous

to boldly witness
such radiant vulnerability
without a claim

to keep her pressed
under glass, instinctual
yet hopelessly dangerous

to know this brutal age 
old ache is to have lived
a life across the threshold

Rene ~ 2013



24 comments:

  1. the last stanaza takes the emoyion and frames it like this battle shield. I liked the power of this one, Rene. it's terrific.

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  2. Some day, perhaps, the treshold will be breached. Until then furtive glances spur hope.
    rel

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  3. She doesn't look virginal to me... just sayin'...

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    1. Hah!
      And where do you think you're going without a bra, Missy?!

      I swear my kid could be going out in a nun's habit and this image is how I would see her :)

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  4. Rene, your poem is amazing. The last line, perfection.

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  5. haha...there is def some strength to your voice in this...and your mention of kids in the comments adds a whole other level...oy...there will come a time of letting go and i am not looking forward to it...smiles...though my son had his first sleep over this weekend..

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  6. fabulous-especially the last stanza

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  7. I have to say fabulous as well--and yes, especially the last stanza!

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  8. to know this brutal age old ache
    is to have lived

    Exactly! one gets to know it better having experienced it first hand. Pain or pleasure is up to the individual. But the rules need to be bent a little before that. Nicely Rene!

    Hank

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  9. That last line is stunning Rene!!

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  10. "a life across the threshold" - I like that.

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  11. Something very Dorian Gray about this one , Exacting. Thanks Rene

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  12. Hopelessly dangerous - now that's real danger...

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  13. "to know this brutal age old ache
    is to have lived
    a life across the threshold"

    Now *that's* poetry. Been there, excellent writing!

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  14. ..i like "to keep her pressed under glass"... this alone volumes a wide scope of emotion... smiles...

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  15. I enjoyed, and I am straight, lol. I like the voice and presentation. A life across the threshold is an amazing line and could be a great title for your book.

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  16. How beautifully you illustrate our desire to protect the innocent. Fruitless, in the end, but admirable nonetheless.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/09/youth-on-their-own/

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