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I always end up at Gate of Heaven
after the pub, but before dinner
drownin' in liquid amnesia
drownin' in liquid amnesia
it's safer under the oaks
away from them and selfishly envious of
feckin' Able Moore.
away from them and selfishly envious of
feckin' Able Moore.
Lucky bastard, dying like he did
war hero, soldier, saint
not a livin', sufferin' forgotten,
faceless sonofabitch
bummin' cigarettes
faceless sonofabitch
bummin' cigarettes
from snot nosed brats at the Seven Eleven
Remember me?
I didn't always run
and hide on the Fourth of July
pissin' myself in terror
and hide on the Fourth of July
pissin' myself in terror
Tell me
Don't you goddamn
Don't you goddamn
remember me?
I don't feckin' care if you don't
But oh my Jesus,
don't you forget to remember me, Able
don't you forget to remember me, Able
when I come into your kingdom
don't you dare, man
don't you goddamn dare
don't you dare, man
don't you goddamn dare
Rene ~ November 2011
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NICE!!
ReplyDeleteHolla that !!! :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a gift! This is an amazing Magpie.
ReplyDeleteYes, PTSD devastates.
Sweet Rene- You've always had a way with words... through the many years that I have been reading your works, you always come through! I saw the man in my mind as I read each word, asking, "Do you remember me?" The attitude, his posture and eyes of wonder...
ReplyDeleteMuch Peace & Blessings dear friend
You write the way real folk talk, Rene. excellent!
ReplyDeletePowerful and honest. Well done!
ReplyDeleteevocative rene...when i come into your kingdom is a nice summation...strong voice...
ReplyDeleteTouching but not sentimental - I like this very much. Every word seems right.
ReplyDeleteWhen Able comes to the table
ReplyDeletemay we all be there!
Excellent. Great fun!
and as Sasha would say, "Holla, baby!"
ReplyDeleteholla indeed.
a worthy conversation, in my book!
ReplyDeletePTSD is no joke. Really nice take on the prompt, dearie.
ReplyDeleteGood suprise at the end.
ReplyDeleteOne of my favorite books is Spoon River Anthology. It's really one of a kind.
Neat!
ReplyDeleteIf truth be known........that was right up my dead-end street!! You got my No1 vote so far, missus!
ReplyDelete"Don't forget to remember"
ReplyDeleteQuite!
Ahhh, Rene. You just keep getting better.
ReplyDeletePearl
Excellent.
ReplyDeleteWonderful write and agree, don't forget to remember.
ReplyDeleteGood work here, Rene. A problem too many people are too able to look anywhere but at.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this... you really got into the character which in turn got me into the poem.
ReplyDeleteRene you do have an amazing talent....love your fresh take on the prompt!!
ReplyDeleteSay it as it is. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteExcellent Rene and a worthy illustration of PTSD.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Dear Rene
ReplyDeleteIn some simple day to day words, you have painted an emotional picture... thanks for sharing...
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html
Spellbinding!
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