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neptune's telephone

Photo courtesy of Tess Kincaid for Magpie Tales





i'm gonna downsize
to a palace
i can carry on my back
givin' up my 
landline
gettin' off the fast track
breakin' up
my shell collection
scatterin' it all a'round
on several sunny beaches
that's where it'd all be found
so if you'd like
to reach me 
or just leave me alone
grab a conch
and ring me 
on neptune's telephone

Rene ~ June 2011

Comments

  1. Jotter GirlJune 14, 2011 at 9:55 PM

    Love this little ditty! You are so very clever Rene.

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  2. ElaineJune 14, 2011 at 9:56 PM

    Or reach you by "Shell Phone". Very clever write Rene. Great rhyming too!

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  3. Brian MillerJune 14, 2011 at 10:05 PM

    well that would certainly be simplifying things...all i get from the phone is the sound of the waves though...

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  4. CMJune 14, 2011 at 10:21 PM

    Awesome! I loved it! Short and to the point, very fun and creative.

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  5. Fragrant LiarJune 14, 2011 at 10:27 PM

    This was GREAT, Rene! Very fun!

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  6. Sean VesseyJune 14, 2011 at 11:29 PM

    What a shell game! Great poem. thank you for sharing.

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  7. UnknownJune 14, 2011 at 11:40 PM

    I can hear the tune for this one.

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  8. UnknownJune 15, 2011 at 12:14 AM

    sweet, simple, sublime.
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/14/letting-go/

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  9. John (@bookdreamer)June 15, 2011 at 4:18 AM

    Nice and simple - I feel a song in the air

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  10. JinksyJune 15, 2011 at 6:05 AM

    Elaine's comment takes the biscuit! 'Shell phone'! LOL

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  11. R. Burnett BakerJune 15, 2011 at 8:48 AM

    Great modern commentary, and really really fun to read!

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  12. Anna LeflerJune 15, 2011 at 8:57 AM

    I love this, Rene! For many reasons...

    And thank you for the sweet congratulatory comment on my blog - I truly appreciate that.

    Have a smooth day and chat with you soon...

    :-}) Anna

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  13. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 9:09 AM

    I loved the sing-song casual feel of your words. Great set up with those first three lines!

    - Dina

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  14. BrendanJune 15, 2011 at 9:34 AM

    Hey, I'm all for a party line into the blue deeparoo, conch shells for Dixie cups, poems for wires plugged into every happy beach. O Neptune, you keep me hangin' on the telephone ... Brendan

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  15. Lucy WestenraJune 15, 2011 at 9:48 AM

    The plays-on-words are apt, and amusing. Thank you

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  16. HelenJune 15, 2011 at 12:14 PM

    Ring .. ring .. it's me Helen. I wait each week to see what treat you have created. This one is quite tasty!

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  17. Stafford RayJune 15, 2011 at 4:18 PM

    A shell phone! Why didn't Maxwell think of that 99?
    But seriously (I'm kidding) this only needs a melody and you have a hit song!

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  18. HelenaJune 15, 2011 at 5:52 PM

    Aaaaah! That was fun indeed. Who needs mobile phones, eh..!?

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  19. Pat HattJune 15, 2011 at 6:30 PM

    Fun read, enjoyed the pacing of it, had a nice ring to it..haha

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  20. UnknownJune 15, 2011 at 7:22 PM

    thanks guys! I have a feeling you'll all be singing this one on the beach :)

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  21. Irish GumboJune 15, 2011 at 7:58 PM

    When you pick up the phone, you can hear the ocean.

    See ya 'round, Rene. I may do some beachcombing of my own :)

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  22. Vodka MomJune 15, 2011 at 10:07 PM

    adore.

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  23. KavitaJune 16, 2011 at 2:00 PM

    MWAAHHHH!! Awesome!! I am picking up this telephone RIGHT NOW!! I need to make some urgent calls.. :)

    Gosh... I soooo loved this, Rene! Hats off to your imagery!!

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  24. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 3:52 PM

    This was brill!
    I can actually see a little fella singing along with it!

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  25. Tess KincaidJune 17, 2011 at 9:43 AM

    It truly is a gift to be simple. Love this.

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  26. Casey FreelandJune 17, 2011 at 8:23 PM

    Sounds wonderful. Great piece.

    Cheers,

    Casey

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  27. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJune 18, 2011 at 6:04 AM

    unbeatable humor.
    the last line makes me smile.
    profound tale.

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  28. Deb KirkeeideJune 20, 2011 at 5:39 PM

    Love this!

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