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underneath untamed
untamable earth
transplanted roots
tangled and took
hold unrecognized,
red legged and
darkly twisted
a same boat muchness
it was either this or hell
luckily, this was far worse
as this was unexpected
for this turbulent, eroded
uncontrolled dragons mouth
was perfect for apes and
bearded savages
to run amok this place
was for cave dwellers
this was no place for settlers


Rene ~ March 2011


Photo by Tess Kincaid for Magpie Tales

Comments

  1. Brian MillerMarch 14, 2011 at 6:46 PM

    dang...effective...it took two readings, but...this dragons mouth, no place for settlers but for savages...i like it...

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  2. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallMarch 14, 2011 at 10:04 PM

    awesome take,
    love the twists and wit in it.

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  3. ElaineMarch 14, 2011 at 10:33 PM

    Wonderful words as always Rene!

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  4. MaggieMarch 15, 2011 at 12:13 AM

    Oh, this is good.

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  5. EvelynMarch 15, 2011 at 8:54 AM

    "a same boat muchness
    it was either this or hell"
    love it!
    who says muchness?
    ME! from now on...

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  6. Tess KincaidMarch 15, 2011 at 9:18 AM

    Delicious. I devoured these words twice. Out loud.

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  7. UnknownMarch 15, 2011 at 11:06 AM

    This one just flows. Did your pen ever leave the paper?
    On the message... I chose to come to this savage land. The better to tame my own beasts. And you? ;-)

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  8. HelenMarch 15, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    'transplanted roots' ... from where we come. Rene, this is a great poem.

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  9. Tumblewords:March 15, 2011 at 6:40 PM

    Brilliant piece - brilliant!

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  10. TimoteoMarch 15, 2011 at 7:49 PM

    Does "bearded savages" refer to me?

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  11. Isabel DoyleMarch 16, 2011 at 2:56 AM

    I was very impressed by your poem, thank you

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  12. ianMarch 16, 2011 at 3:32 AM

    "it was either this or hell,
    luckily, this was far worse"

    i love those lines, together.

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  13. Brother OllieMarch 16, 2011 at 7:35 AM

    Sounds like home.

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  14. LauraMarch 16, 2011 at 7:38 AM

    Powerful Rene...such a different take on this image from others...well done!

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  15. Shashidhar SharmaMarch 16, 2011 at 9:37 AM

    Dear Rene

    Very raw and strong verse... so hitting and vivid.. I enjoyed it very much..


    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/03/whispers-love-and-insignificance.html
    Connect me at Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  16. Lucy WestenraMarch 16, 2011 at 11:57 AM

    Complex and erudite.

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  17. ClaudiaMarch 16, 2011 at 1:14 PM

    i love the turbulent, eroded
    uncontrolled dragons mouth..

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  18. signed...bkmMarch 16, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    Love no place for settlers...for cave dwellers...that is a mythical place indeed...bkm

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  19. Steve IsaakMarch 16, 2011 at 7:30 PM

    Solid work, made me smile.

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  20. Vodka MomMarch 16, 2011 at 9:27 PM

    primrose. One of my favorites.

    Like you.

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  21. dustusMarch 16, 2011 at 10:06 PM

    Excellent use of metaphors and colorful, evocative language.

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  22. MartinMarch 17, 2011 at 3:53 AM

    Outstanding, Rene! "...took
    hold unrecognized,
    red legged and
    darkly twisted..." just one image, conjured from a wonderful use of language.

    Poetry24…where news is the Muse

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  23. Laurie KolpMarch 17, 2011 at 10:31 AM

    Love the alliteration and vivid images!

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  24. MarianMarch 17, 2011 at 10:32 AM

    same boat muchness? god how i love you.

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  25. Carrie Van HornMarch 17, 2011 at 12:16 PM

    You captured a time and place....this is amazing Rene! :-)

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  26. Mark KerstetterMarch 17, 2011 at 4:31 PM

    Well, I don't know that I can thrill you. I'm not sure exactly what's going on here but I like the language. I find "a same boat muchness" captivating, even if I don't know what it means.

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  27. ~T~March 17, 2011 at 10:39 PM

    What wild, vivid words! Wonderful.

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  28. KavitaMarch 18, 2011 at 4:02 AM

    Whooaa!! Some amazing wordplay here!!
    Raw, vivid and fantastic!!
    I slipped back eras with this one..

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  29. Coloring Outside the LinesMarch 18, 2011 at 3:25 PM

    You hit this one out of the park- excellent imagery- apes and bearded savages

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  30. Jim SwindleMarch 19, 2011 at 4:55 AM

    I don't fully understand it, but am fascinated by the imagery.

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  31. Jotter GirlMarch 19, 2011 at 6:39 PM

    You just keep getting better and better Rene.

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  32. HelenaMarch 20, 2011 at 1:47 PM

    Hey Hey! A fine piece indeed. I love how it veers from the simulates here!

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