I was driving down the freeway today, north towards the mountains that surround three sides of our town, and I thought you would have to write a poem about them. Every peak was dusted with snow and Shasta and Lassen are almost all white. Bright, clear and cold day in Northern California.Cheers,Casey
ok, its the title that sent me there...but my mind went straight to the gutter....
Neruda and I agree. I must trek to a seashore at least annually, feel the ocean water on my skin, or all is not right. And, oh! Your poem is incredibly warm and sensuous. Love it.
I'm hot for teacher in a very sensuous way.
...under the boardwalk,down by the seeeea...(sigh)
the waves that the lines make is a great compliment to the words, which ebb and flow like waves on the shore.
yep, this is all hot and and sexy and shit. love it, naturally.
I love it, especially the "moody indigo" and the "lustful moon". and the thirsting for the "poetic mouthful". Wow.
Some unique wordplays there that come together in advancing the very sexy tone of the work...tight descriptions.
Oh this is wonderful, and what attentive writing, your rolling, swelling words and the poem's lovely form...
the cradle of us all, and a true teacher. You've used color, image and rhythm really well here to evoke the salt never-quenching smell of the sea.
Beautiful tribute to the sea...and what a gracious and always giving teacher she is...giving us music and poetry and renewing wisdom...blessings...bkm
Such a wonderful teacher she is, luring us with melodies, guiding our sails by the tide, mesmerizing moments, split second reactions... teaching us to feel rather than think... feel the ebbs pulling.
Your pounding, swelling, ebbing, effervescenceWhat better lover could I have Than the one who licks my bare feetWith a salty, sand encrusted tongue.OneLove--Tiger Windwalker
Wonderful, leave 'em breathless, great flow work.
Ah, the title drew me inand I drowned in beauty
Ohhh... this is simply BEAUTIFUL!!! I knew that seas could be charming in their "appearances"... but now mannerisms too?! Woowww...I just loved this personification, Rene!! Lovely...and soooo romantic! I can feel the salty water crystallizing on my skin... like gentle hands stopping me...
I had to read this twice for the joy of it.
ah - i love the psalmsof moody indigo...
Psalms of moody indigo... lovely.. I enjoyed it so much...Thanks for sharing...ॐ नमः शिवायOm Namah Shivayahttp://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/03/whispers-winter-dew.htmlTwitter @VerseEveryDay
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