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Tuesday, March 1, 2011

pucker


you're a ray of sunshine
with a zest for life
motivation slogans
comin' out your pipe

coverin' up your bruises
with a pink band-aid
excusin' all the madness
with some bad cliches

well you can go on
pilin' them blankets
on your little bed of lies
or grab a heapin' forkful
of some radical advice

it's just some
refrigerator magnet wisdom
for you to display
"instead of lemons
throw a grenade"

Rene ~ 2011



This was a Magpie Tales entry. Photo by Tess Kincaid. Tess assures all that no lemons were harmed in the making of this photo.

35 comments:

  1. I hear you! Not advocating violence here...quite the opposite, actually.
    Bad, toxic, abusive relationships need to be nuked.

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  2. whew! I love what is coming out of this weeks photo!

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  3. BOOM!

    This is grrrreat!!!

    Get it?

    HA!

    Glad to see you pulled the pin :)

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  4. This is gnarly! And violence disguised as passion is awesome too. Sorry, I have been on the Charlie Sheen thing all day long and it really does rub off on you (me).

    Seriously, this was way cool.

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  5. woohoo now you are talking! really who would do that to a lemon any way...smiles.

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  6. You are so right about those toxic relationships. Love the way you described the abuse as being covered by a band aid.

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  7. I'm confused, scared and a little sad for that little guy. But, if you're going to murder something, I think a lemon is the way to go.

    Cheers,

    Casey

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  8. No lemonade stands here. You knocked this one out of the park!

    Go girl, squash them battered relationships.

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  9. Whoohoo! The revolution is afoot! Well done.

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  10. Clever, sharp take on the prompt!

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  11. loved the fast paced flow here...it almost sounded like RAP lyrics...really neat and refreshing write

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  12. You Go girl ... I be singin' this the whole day long .......

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  13. They say: life gives you lemons you make lemonade. I wonder how they'll put a positive spin on grenades coming your way.

    This really cracked me up! Thanks!

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  14. Spiky and real, great take on the prompt.

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  15. Bad cliches is right. Gosh, don't I know it. Great write, Rene.

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  16. Hear, hear! "comin' out your pipe" is one of a few great lines in this, Rene.

    Kat

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  17. another fine piece. i'm somewhat jealous of your way with words. you often write lines that make me curse for not having written them first.

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  18. From the title to the last word, this piece sings and shines. Tasty with a touch of not-so-sweet.

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  19. It is rather cheery, until the end. Kaboom. : )

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  20. Throw a grenade...seriously made me laugh out loud. I finally found the response to this prompt that played hide and seek with me for days:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/03/02/ideal-afternoon/

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  21. Yeah! Pitch it in there baby! heyyyyyyyy batta batta batta swing! LOL

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  22. Now that was super friggin' awesome, Rene... Sour relationships give 'em lemons a bad name, I tell ya!

    Ohh.. I like forkful of radical advice!! Umm.. not taking it per-se... but the sound of it in this poem! :)

    A blast of a take on the prompt!!

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  23. Seriously- you need to become a song writer.

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  24. That just blew me away.....

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