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Monday, February 21, 2011

need



fortune tumbles
hits at the peak
and rolls down 
weathered granite
finding it's way
towards filling a need
naturally
man made concrete 
halts it's progress
a dam that does not give
for safety's sake
that's the claim it makes
while down below
the thirsty, hopeful valley
eyes the sky and cries
unlock, quench us 
with what is fair and
what is right
but this wall
does not stand to reason

peace - Rene

8 comments:

  1. drench the valley please...fortunes should not be dammed...smiles.

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  2. Excellent on many levels--literal, personal and political. Someday the dam will break.

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  3. Nor do those controlling the wall. In our world we call them BLM. No one ever agrees on need. Ever. And so the answer is never a simple one.

    Cheers,

    Casey

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  4. Need. An apt poem.

    It makes sense because we understand thirst, don't we?

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  5. Nicely done. Need is a popular topic these days and makes me wonder why there is more need today and not less.

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  6. Man-made walls are not usually reasonable, are they? This is tight, succinct and allusory. I read it several times over two days, liking it more with each read.

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  7. A great double meaning at the outset with 'fortune'. Some excellent understated rhyme with 'sake' and 'makes'.
    Interesting, thoughtful piece.

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  8. "The thirsty hopeful valley" - so well said......wonderful impact in your closing lines. Well done!

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