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Friday, January 28, 2011

threshold

Film still from "The Door In The Floor" 
in that corner of time 
after everything left
dangling unsaid 
had been said
but before 
the absolute end of it all


in that small punctuation
of light before dusk
that glistening
surrendering eye of silent truce
this is where
i have chosen to remember you


Rene ~ January 2011

30 comments:

  1. I saw that movie ... or at least a bit of it.

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  2. Ahhh!

    "punctuation of light"

    I can't tell if the door is opening or closing...and I like that.

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  3. i wonder if we all have those mental snap shots we cling to...to remember...

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  4. those moments frozen in our minds eye, do they ever fade?

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  5. Nicely done to the prompt. I did not see the movie, but I must try and find it.
    Pamela

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  6. You have chosen - and interpreted - a beautiful image.
    Very atmospheric.

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  7. 'a small punctuation of light before dusk' what a showing phrase! I can feel this piece - lovely work.

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  8. Beautifully composed - just right!

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  9. There's many a door in a floor I wish I'd fallen through...

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  10. Good fit to the photo.

    http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2011/01/28/perfect-family-big-tent-poetry/

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  11. This one really touched me. I tried to pick a favorite line, but they all stand out strong.

    ~laurie

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  12. there comes a time


    when there are


    no words.





    (you rock)

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  13. Ah, that moment, that hesitation, that wonder of future regret, that loss of familiarity. Loss, even then. That's what it is.

    Casey

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  14. Never been able to do this. My exes pretty much have the run of my mind. I guess I like it this way.

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  15. This is a wonderful poem--I particularly like your 2nd stanza! Some wonderful imagery here.

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  16. Oh I like it. It's like choosing to hold on to the moment just before they let go!

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  17. "...that glistening surrendering eye of silent truce...."

    This is where the sounds and rhythms of words combine with their meanings to create something truly gorgeous.

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  18. Thank you everyone for stopping in, reading my stuff and telling me what you think about it. I truly appreciate that you have taken the time.

    I recommend "The Door In The Floor" as a Netflix pick.It's based on John Irving's "A Widow For One Year".
    The scene near the end where Marion ( Kim Basinger) and Ted ( Jeff Bridges)silently say goodbye is nothing short of superb.

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  19. Thresholds. Such a great word/idea/diving board.

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  20. Rene, this was my absolute favorite of your poems so far. Absolutely loved the word choice, rhythm, and poignancy. Well done. Well done.

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  21. Fantastic words adn great ending. :)

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  22. I've seen more people pass on than most and I'm convinced that, upon our deathbeds, our minds will be so worn bare that all we will have is our own biased memories of what was. That's probably how we will judge the value of our lives.

    You've summed that same phenomenon up nicely, albeit for the death of a relationship. That is something that I am personally more familiar with and less fond of than death.

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  23. lovely imagery,
    your words rock.

    Happy Potluck!

    A++

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  24. Very well done Renee. I especially like the closing lines. This one is worth reading over again.

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