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bad girl risin'

Rene 2010




complicated pleasure
confiscated time
don’t bother to measure
she’s surely crossed the line
drawn by his hand
drawn to his love
driven by the stars
and the full moon above
the innocent eyes of a good girl
betray desires of the bad girl 
kept held at bay




~Rene



Comments

  1. FelinaeNovember 16, 2010 at 12:03 AM

    I love it!!
    Thanks for sharing your talent with us, Rene. :)

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  2. Irish GumboNovember 16, 2010 at 6:39 AM

    I'm not so sure that the bad girl is really all that bad. After all, complicated is normal so often when love and desire face each other.

    Me likey.

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  3. Brian MillerNovember 16, 2010 at 6:47 AM

    and perhaps...in just the right moment they can both come out and play in the yard at once...and realise they have so much more fun together...smiles.

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  4. FireblossomNovember 16, 2010 at 6:58 AM

    Play in the yard, Brian my friend? Play somewhere else, sounds like to me!

    I like what Irish Gumbo said. I would deny my Bad Girl if only I wanted to, and didn't need her horns to keep my halo straight.

    LOVED this, Rene. :-)

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  5. FireblossomNovember 16, 2010 at 7:00 AM

    PS--my word verification was "later". Yeah, well, see ya, Mr. Spooky Scramble Word.

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  6. Fred MillerNovember 16, 2010 at 10:45 AM

    You have the best commentors, Rene. You bring out the best in them.

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  7. jbNovember 16, 2010 at 11:35 AM

    Love it Rene...really really brilliant.

    huggs
    jb

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  8. Coloring Outside the LinesNovember 16, 2010 at 11:45 AM

    Ok, I went all "Undercover Angel" with this one. Must be my mood today. Lyrical inspiration!

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  9. UnknownNovember 16, 2010 at 3:57 PM

    Fred, the best commentors? That I do, without a doubt :)

    I just let them play...in the yard.

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  10. FireblossomNovember 16, 2010 at 5:18 PM

    ^^^lemme in, lemme in! *scrunches face up against the window*

    LOL

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  11. EvelynNovember 16, 2010 at 5:41 PM

    aww, really beautiful and fun

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  12. UnknownNovember 16, 2010 at 5:46 PM

    wipe your feet, Shay...or else you'll get the hose

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  13. Steve IsaakNovember 16, 2010 at 7:11 PM

    Great flow to this, word choices.

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  14. AnonymousNovember 16, 2010 at 8:27 PM

    *smudges window with her nose*

    (and nudges her way around Shay)

    Yards are not as much fun as playgrounds. I say bring all the girls, good and bad and let's get some serious kick-the-can going.

    'Sides, you can't have Good without Bad. No flavor.

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  15. AnonymousNovember 16, 2010 at 10:19 PM

    lovely work.

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  16. Casey FreelandNovember 16, 2010 at 11:52 PM

    Hey Rene! Missed your poetry. Don't even begin to tell me this piece was some sort of allegory to washing dishes or something. If I'm reading too much into this one, I need shock therapy.

    Great work!

    Cheers,

    Casey

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  17. moondustwriterNovember 17, 2010 at 12:41 AM

    Oooo I love the lines drawn by words, shadows, innuendo

    A flavorful One Shot

    moon Smiles

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  18. anthonynorthNovember 17, 2010 at 3:35 AM

    Excellent words to go with that pic.

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  19. CorbieNovember 17, 2010 at 6:27 AM

    Wow, very nice! The flow to your words is magical. Great One Shot!

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  20. UnknownNovember 17, 2010 at 6:28 AM

    Casey! Where've you been?

    yup, dishwashing...you are so onto me :)

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  21. BubbaNovember 17, 2010 at 12:59 PM

    Better to let out that bad girl on occasion than to try and keep her locked up too tightly, because she'll just bust out eventually and go WILD!

    Nice One Shot, Rene!

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  22. Shashidhar SharmaNovember 18, 2010 at 1:33 AM

    Hi Rene
    Perfect verse in such a short lines..whether crossed or not, the line is there to be crossed... and as the innocent eyes betray the desires of 'bad' girl, I felt the betrayal is not her but of the inviting, sensuous hands...
    I liked this one very much...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  23. MichaelNovember 19, 2010 at 12:21 PM

    hahahah. yes right, dishwashing! Umm...some kind of washing but not exactly dishes unless you can consier the protagonist as such.

    Another brilliant little verse here. I love it. the photo works well too. light in the dark.

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