The Fifty Cent Tour

Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Finale

tongues of fire
spread the news
of a brilliant history

in peach baskets
we gather the fallen
each one magnificent precious

green booted we
playfully scud cones
and needles heavenward

harvest fragrances dance
as wet earth mingles
with burnt offerings

branches heavy bearing
gifts of a year in the life
to make sweet the dark time



Rene ~ 2010


A Magpie Tales submission for Magpie 35.
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61 comments:

  1. Tres bien mon ami
    It must be getting really fall-ish and beautiful up there!

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  2. You're not the only one who wrote also about flames too, ya know. I did too, because I miss the summer just as anyone here would, haha. Wanna see my Magpie? It's at http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com

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  3. Lovely. I love fall leaves, and you describe how it feels to be among them very well.

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  4. dang. that was awesome rene...love the subtle undertones of this...and of fall...my fav time of year...excellent write.

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  5. Beautiful writing. I love 'tongues of fire" -- so appropriate for autumn!

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  6. I'm just going to repeat why I love your poetry. You've got it all here. Sight, sound, taste, touch, smell. Poetry should be sensuous.

    Bud of the Baskervilles

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  7. 'Green boots playfully scud needles'! Such a picture in a few words.

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  8. This is my favorite season. And you? you are one of my favorite friends.


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  9. Brillant write..."make sweet the dark time" - love it all...a must read again...thank you...bkm

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  10. Ah yes, your flames have singed the edges of a beatiful presentation of the colors of autumn.

    Very nice magpie.

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  11. A subtle warning of Winter... nice. ;)

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  12. Wonderful images conjured up - lovely post

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  13. That was beautiful, I loved the descriptions and the energy in your words. I am going to read it again! :-)

    My Magpie

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  14. "make sweet the dark time soon to fall..."

    Oh, yes you did :)

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  15. Wow! I LOVE this, Rene! "...we gather the fallen in peach baskets" is a remarkable line!!

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  16. One of the best of this Magpie's many takes on the shades and hues of Autumn.

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  17. A nice evocative piece of writing you've crafted here. A wonderful Magpie.

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  18. Nothing can beat scuffling through fallen leave in Autumn! :)

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  19. You're killing me over here. Tell me, Rene: you see everything in terms of its beauty and relation to other things, don't you?

    Another great poem.

    Pearl

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  20. lovely images and my senses are stimulated with the smells of fall and burning leaves and the sensation of slipperiness of boots on leaves. nicely evoked.

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  21. Hi! I have a pair of bright green boots .. I must find them to frolic in the falling leaves!

    Great Magpie!

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  22. Fall gives us such wonderful memories.

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  23. "harvest fragrances dance"... what a pretty picture and I loved your images!

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  24. "..tongues of fire
    spread the news
    of a brilliant history.." Quite wonderful.

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  25. How gorgeous this poem is - so visual and tactile!

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  26. autumn, the most beautiful season of the year.

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  27. From one autumn fan to another, that was spectacular. Loved the imagery and the energy of your piece.

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  28. Lovely poem Rene... Fire and fall was a explosive combination.. Too good...

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  29. make sweet the dark time
    soon to fall - ah, this transient world!

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  30. make sweet the dark time
    soon to fall - ah, this transient world!

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  31. Rene:

    My first time to your lovely blog way of magpie -- thanks for the lovely comment on mine....

    Like Mary Oliver you are influenced by living in a beautiful New England State and your poem brilliantly captures the exquisite essence of the season.

    I would love to send you a little duckling for the reminder of the coming spring - for the winters there can be icy cold. But your memories of the Fall will be enough to carry you through.

    Cheers,
    Joanny

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  32. Beautiful, have read the reference to Mary Oliver, and see it, too (she is one of my fave poets ever!).

    The lines I loved best:

    "as wet earth mingles
    with burnt offerings,"

    captures the fall feeling so well.

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  33. Rene this is magnificent...so much delightful imagery...fall is definitely in the air and in our hearts! :-)

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  34. LOL. Love the "thrill me" under "Leave your comment". Beautiful poem "harvest fragrances dance" - my favorite line!

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  35. "Make sweet the dark time"...Definitely! Superb poem..thanks!

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  36. Your poem creates a wonderful feeling. What a great use of words.

    Loved it.

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  37. "branches bearing gifts of a year...make sweet the dark life soon to fall." Brilliant!

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  38. "magnificently hued
    green boots playfully
    scud needles and cones
    heavenward"

    Beautifully written poem...
    Thank you for visiting me ..

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  39. Mmmm...this poem is so alive with all the flavors of autumn.

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  40. What a marvelous piece! 'scud' - I love that word. It has a few Scottish meanings to it, also.

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  41. Thank you all for your truly wonderful comments!

    I hope you are all enjoying beautiful fall weather...it is gorgeous in the Northeast :)

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  42. Rene,

    Some of these phrases really hit home: 'peach baskets' and 'scud needles and cones' make me want to stay and read again.

    Trulyfool

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  43. Oh, I love it. Great word choices.

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  44. wow - this was brilliant - gather the fallen in peach baskets...great imagery!

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  45. the imagery here is FANTASTIC! :D lovely use of words! :)

    My Magpie Is Here:
    http://leonnyes.wordpress.com/2010/10/07/wanderer/

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  46. love it rene! i can smell the smells and feel the hope.

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  47. Really lovely poem, I particularly like the ending - "make sweet the dark time/soon to fall"

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  48. Willow would be proud. An excellent addition to Magpie Tales

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  49. Rene,
    Autumn's muse always tingles my imagination and I see that it gets to you also!
    rel
    "playfully
    scud needles and cones
    heavenward"

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  50. Thank you all so much!
    Autumn is my favorite season...actually early autumn :)

    Hope you all are enjoying this beautiful fall weather

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  51. It is my favorite season also, and, although I am quite late in reading Magpies #35 I know that my autumn has been enhanced by the beauty of your poem. Really loved it.

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