The Fifty Cent Tour

Wednesday, September 8, 2010

Lover's Tree





'an as much as he sayed
he loved me
jimmy never did
put
my name
up on lover's tree


'ah gots it bad for ya
emmie
he go 'an cry dat into
my bosom
sucklin' like a newborn
'an springing up between me


'an so i bled
'and i scream
'an i cry hard tears
jus' like a woman do
for dat tiger man
jimmy


'an den he tell me
yous a sweet girl
i luv you
emmie...
yous a sweet, sweet
girl


'an as much as he sayed
he loved me
jimmy never did
put
my name
up on dat lover's tree


Rene

16 comments:

  1. oh like the accent...gotta watch out for jimmy...a tree aint on his mind...

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  2. Aiiiiggghhh! That hurts!

    Do it again!

    (and remind me to send you a picture of the lover's tree I found not too far from my house)

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  3. ouch, that's a little raw.
    damn tiger man.

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  4. You really put lots of good stuff together, there. It's a novel in a poem almost.

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  5. I liked this a whole lot, Rene. It's put a whole film-reel in my head and I don't know if the poem is really as innocent as it seems (especially since I read your "red whore's dress" comment over at John Hayes's.)

    Kat

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  6. This is such a pretty poem... and I LOVE that tree. Is it in your yard?

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  7. Thanks everyone for reading and commenting...

    Emmie and Jimmy.
    They've entered a new phase in their relationship.
    They both have some growing up to do.
    They're not kids anymore.

    The tree is one I photographed in the Public Garden in Boston

    Rene

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  8. This is a nice respite in my "serious" reading...and then I think...why, THIS is about as serious as it gets.

    I'm guessing your name finally made it to that tree?

    Thanks
    Peace!

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  9. Some tiger...more like an alley cat!

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  10. Great photo and great poem. I just coulnd't even imagine writing in such a style as you have so successfully pulled off here. :)

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  11. Sad and realistic. Some women will believe anything.

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  12. very creative, the idea behind it is engaging yet almost humorous. This is so different and so easy to read I just loved it!

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  13. I love this, as it is reality and the promises and the pain of what we thought was love!!!

    Best wishes, Eileen

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  14. sad, love is mutual,
    he lied, didn't he?

    powerful imagery,
    well put.

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