The Fifty Cent Tour

Sunday, March 7, 2010

thirst quencher

give me a drink
of your water
from a well
that is unfit for me
give me a drink
of your water
that man's
not your husband
i see
give me a drink
of your water
and I will
set you free
give me a drink
of your water
come live forever
in me

Peace ~ Rene

17 comments:

  1. This one confused me a bit. The part about "that man's not your husband" threw me off. I thought I was getting better at interpreting your work, but I'm lost here. Care to explain or would you rather be mysterious?

    Cheers,

    SLC

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  2. woman at the well...becuase the man she lives with now is not her husband...nicely done...

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  3. Gladly Spencer, this poem is based on John 4
    The Samaratin Woman At The Well

    Peace ~ Rene

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  4. Hmm...still thinking about this one. I like the imagery quite a lot, though :)

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  5. This is beautiful. For some reason, I thought right away of the woman at the well. Your poetry is very intriguing.

    Thought you might like to know that I have a visitor on my blog, today, who will be sharing her grampa's true-life adventures as a Rider on one of the Orphan Trains! There's room for everyone to gather in close and get to know Donna, while enjoying her wonderful story-telling talents. I look forward to seeing you there.

    Yaya
    Yaya's Changing World

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  6. I was worried for your marriage until I read that it was based on a parable. Phew! So happy to find that I totally misinterpreted. :)

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  7. Yeah, that one line in the middle is twisting up a lot of folks...
    I like it! Just when you think you have everything figured out...whoa :)

    Peace ~ Rene

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  8. An appropriate yet inspiring poem for Lent... living water. Great work.

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  9. Rene, Rene, Rene. I've been so negligent in keeping up with blogs, etc. So what a nice treat to come to this one. And I was so proud of myself... oh, wait, pride cometh before the fall. Anyway, I knew what you were writing about and it's lovely! A great story, and one that's so important to remember. Hooray for the spring countdown!! Peace, hugs. ~ Ginny

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  10. Made me think of that post I did a while ago about the woman in a village in India who was ostracized by the entire village because she touched the arm of an outsider at the well....

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  11. Reminds me of the old story of the woman at the well.

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  12. Your allusion was clear to me too. Don't change a thing! I loved its rhythm.

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  13. wonderful. Love it totally. Love this bit in particular:

    "from a well
    that is unfit for me"

    nice.

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