that's the last time
she said
as she put it on the shelf
behind
the last, last time
but maybe next time
just not now
everything's fine
no, really
everything's good
how convincingly
she fooled them all
her throat stinging
how lovely her cunning
her eyes shining
if nothing else
there was that
and dreams greater than
her less than
fine
Peace ~ Rene
whew. i hope she finds the strength...
ReplyDeleteAhh, we can never truly fool ourselves, can we?
ReplyDeleteCourage, lass...we can find it :)
ReplyDeleteYou weave this together beautifully...your form so perfectly reflects her indecision...and the feeling of being trapped...extraordinary! ~Janine XO
ReplyDelete"...and her freedom
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that door
if she could only
walk across
that floor
and lead a life
greater than
this less than
fine"
You nailed it right there, Rene. She is finally free.
You continue to awe me with your great writing.
ReplyDeleteVery pretty. And from a writing perspective, I LOVE the way you came back to the shelf. You left it alone just long enough for the reader to begin to forget and then made me look at it again. So good.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
SLC
Fantastic! Wonderfully written! I would be truly honored if you gave your poetic advice on my blogs of poetry and follow them if you like.
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Fantastic. That just slid off my brain so easily, Rene.
ReplyDeleteThat deserves music. It really does.
Pearl
non-stick poetry for busy brains
ReplyDeletethat's my new tag-line :)
Thanks Pearly girl
Rene
I read this aloud, Rene. It was wonderful. It was like rhythmic panting to get out, get out, get out....
ReplyDeleteGood work!
One word today ~~ powerful!
ReplyDeleteI always want to yell b*llsh*t when someone tells me everything's fine...
ReplyDeleteLove your Spring countdown... and just noticing your side bar change up. Love your sentiments there.
UnSilencing Violence is possibly the best choice anyone can ever make.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully, poignantly written.
Namaste.
VERY important poem here in fact. I love this. Thank you for saying it so well.
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