like a comet
with a beautiful tail
streaking through your orbit
a flirtation
out of reach
still you're winking
still you're winking
out of habit
you're landscape
under a flight path
brother
one dash
brother
one dash
in a dotted line
one wish
in a billion of
bedside whispers
cast into the sky
and it's gone
before you know it
and all you got
is what you saw
just a fleeting
frozen memory
unable to thaw
2AM Poetry ~ Rene 2010
cast into the sky
and it's gone
before you know it
and all you got
is what you saw
just a fleeting
frozen memory
unable to thaw
2AM Poetry ~ Rene 2010
Very pretty.
ReplyDeletesounds like one i would pop in the microwave on defrost...smiles.
ReplyDeleteI wish for you to never stop writing.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant, Rene. And I agree with Beth. Please don't stop!! Hugs to you.
ReplyDeleteVery nice,
ReplyDeleteI'm going to third the wishes made by Beth and Ginny. Please don't ever stop writing. Your writings transport me to a different place for a brief pause in time.
Thank you, Rene
Smiles~Felinae~
These are really good lines:
ReplyDelete"one dash
in a dotted line
one wish
in a billion of
bedside whispers
cast into the sky"
I haven't been able to write a poem for weeks now. I'm jealous. My word verification is "blesse" so blessings on you.
I loved this Rene!
ReplyDeleteThanks guys
ReplyDeleteand tho I may get stuck sometimes
OK alotta times
I'm not quitting
Peace ~ Rene
Beautiful! And cold. :)
ReplyDeleteVery Nice!
ReplyDeleteI adore these lines:
ReplyDeletein a billion of
bedside whispers
cast into the sky
Makes me think of so many different things.... a little girl praying at her bedside, a woman wishing for change, a couple whispering intimately to each other....
Really beautiful word-smithing.
Beautiful, you have a great talent
ReplyDeleteBrilliant ending. Refusing to thaw--hmm, know that well. :)
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