go on
an'
eat your
eat your
cake
on your
on your
pretty
little
plate
cross
plate
cross
your fingers
at your
at your
ankles
beautiful
beautiful
fools
get the best of
get the best of
everthin'
hid
hid
under the
skins of
careless lovers
did your momma
you're a child
careless lovers
did your momma
teach you that,
when she taught you
when she taught you
how to pray ?
did your daddy
did your daddy
praise you
when you bat
when you bat
yo' eyes?
you draw them
you draw them
in
with your satin
with your satin
on their sin
make them
weep
with your
sighs
go on
go on
an'
hook their
hook their
arms
with your
with your
clever
little
charms
tell them
tell them
stories
'bout
'bout
your conquests
you're a child
of god
jus' doin' her
jus' doin' her
daddy's work
say it
say it
enough
you'll start
you'll start
believin'
did your momma
did your momma
teach you that,
when she taught you
when she taught you
how to pray ?
did your daddy
did your daddy
praise you
when you
bat yo' eyes?
you draw them
you draw them
in
with your satin
with your satin
on their sin
precious little lambs
led
by
by
lies
Rene ~ 2013
Rene ~ 2013
excellent
ReplyDeleteI like how the lies are a main character. It puts the other emotional triggers into perspective.
very strong, rene, very friggin strong
thanks, Lance! A bit of lies, Fiona and The Great Gatsby
ReplyDeletecross your fingers
ReplyDeleteat your ankles
beautiful fools
get the best of everthin'
ha, love that...
and the child of god doin daddy's work, say it enough and you'll believe it...dang....
Very strong piece. I really enjoyed the flow. I can hear the dialect too!
ReplyDeleteWhoosh! Wow. You need to put that to music.
ReplyDeleteLyrical... enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteLike your voice and flow of words here Rene ~
ReplyDeleteSubtle but this goes very deep ~
Enjoyed the rhythm of your poem, Rene....but also see the message beneath. loved this.
ReplyDeleteIt sings, very nice.
ReplyDeleteThe repetition is ideal, adding strength to the words on either side. And your character analysis sheds light on the protagonist's inner self, as well as on the narrator's opinion of her. Always a pleasure to read your work, Rene.
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