tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post3748507768753747681..comments2023-08-27T04:46:25.640-04:00Comments on Not The Rockefellers: letters from the dollhouseAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-42793401203712568752011-04-14T16:17:44.537-04:002011-04-14T16:17:44.537-04:00This is strong, strong, work. And I don't blow...This is strong, strong, work. And I don't blow smoke. You r imagination and ability to express such delightfully unusual imagery/metaphor in verse is exception. Not a cliche in sight. I also like the almost stream of consciousness/internal monologic tone/style, and the fact that it's in tidy septets. This stanza right here will stay with me a while, I knew it as soon as I read it - <br /><br />i sleep in a dollhouse<br />our bed's just too big for me<br />too little for all my nothing, nothings<br />it's okay, but the walls talk too much<br />and the ceiling is a two way mirror<br />with a hairline fracture >superb<br /><br />Many other places that are clever, scathing, deeply poetic, imaginative and humorous too. A lesser poem of this length I would, quite honestly, struggle to get through. Yours carried me along and I smiled for the whole journey. <br /><br />By the way, I run a poetry group meant specifically for constructive crit/honest feedback (as it is so lacking everywhere else, it seems, and how can we learn if everyone just tells us how good our work is all the time whatever?). If you're interested in an environment like that to get some straight-up feedback etc, you're welcome. The link is on my blogroll (it's called Facial Expression Poetry Circle).<br /><br />Outstanding piece.Luke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-64043971891906473792011-04-14T07:02:18.799-04:002011-04-14T07:02:18.799-04:00@jenny_o, it's not your imagination. My work i...@jenny_o, it's not your imagination. My work is always in progress :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-32039597296878855442011-04-13T22:52:50.199-04:002011-04-13T22:52:50.199-04:00Wait, have some lines changed since you first put ...Wait, have some lines changed since you first put this up?!<br /><br />Or did I imagine that?jenny_onoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-78439220940791870572011-04-13T21:11:32.779-04:002011-04-13T21:11:32.779-04:00LOL, love the tone/everything about this. =)LOL, love the tone/everything about this. =)Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-58363956601235819262011-04-13T15:02:28.613-04:002011-04-13T15:02:28.613-04:00Great poem, I enjoyed it.Great poem, I enjoyed it.Kodjo Deynoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01299996598769756878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-76565483563444256542011-04-13T12:34:21.611-04:002011-04-13T12:34:21.611-04:00Somehow missed this Sunday--what a great bunch of ...Somehow missed this Sunday--what a great bunch of zingers in here, and not just shallowly sarcastic, but loaded with real authentic venom. Can't beat it with a stick. Great writing, Rene.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-43670677091921094482011-04-13T11:59:44.745-04:002011-04-13T11:59:44.745-04:00Far out, especially the "mythological clock&q...Far out, especially the "mythological clock" part!Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-51916043598823835582011-04-13T06:11:49.771-04:002011-04-13T06:11:49.771-04:00Great poem, the waiting game, the not knowing, the...Great poem, the waiting game, the not knowing, the gossip. I enjoyed reading.<br /><br />Anita.Anita Magdalenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17759774477028333590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-78842311398759104982011-04-12T23:52:40.762-04:002011-04-12T23:52:40.762-04:00enjoyed the originality here. some really great li...enjoyed the originality here. some really great lines.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01547380098561803645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-63971741838339011792011-04-12T22:37:57.627-04:002011-04-12T22:37:57.627-04:00the fourth stanza is so great ...the mythological ...the fourth stanza is so great ...the mythological clock...pulls all the other stanzas through the dollhouse of living...thank you ..bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-5850356660034328842011-04-12T20:17:44.610-04:002011-04-12T20:17:44.610-04:00"just my imagination running with scissors ag..."just my imagination running with scissors again."<br /><br />DAMN, Renee...one of the best poems I've read in a long time !!!Timoteohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08351410966396854582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-32988232490869188342011-04-12T18:50:35.084-04:002011-04-12T18:50:35.084-04:00I love the "shut up, I really am" and th...I love the "shut up, I really am" and the 108 friends. What a great treatment of the prompt!Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-721017266972844632011-04-12T17:46:26.322-04:002011-04-12T17:46:26.322-04:00You are not invited to play with Ken and Barbie at...You are not invited to play with Ken and Barbie at my house (even if the poem is a great one)Elainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04251279808111725003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-35145070356989165872011-04-12T17:05:02.969-04:002011-04-12T17:05:02.969-04:00thanks for keeping Penelope company y'all...I&...thanks for keeping Penelope company y'all...I'm much obliged :)<br /><br />Seriously, thank you all.<br /><br />ReneAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-76145427634252384812011-04-12T08:21:31.513-04:002011-04-12T08:21:31.513-04:00I confess to not having read more than a scatter o...I confess to not having read more than a scatter of your work -- I'll bookmark your site and try to become a more faithful regular, because the voice here is so odd and strong and innocent and feral all at once, a high voice in the inner inner ear which is savaged by events yet undaunted, fighting back with scissors and a doll's blank, unsmirchable rectiitude. This poem fights fire with its own - BrendanBrendanhttp://blueoran.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-86354792932920825322011-04-12T06:23:45.830-04:002011-04-12T06:23:45.830-04:00Delightful. I never did know where it was going, b...Delightful. I never did know where it was going, but quite content to go with it.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-42159798799254434922011-04-12T00:25:30.297-04:002011-04-12T00:25:30.297-04:00Full of gold nuggets, and chilling.Full of gold nuggets, and chilling.jenny_onoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-18692385416387106132011-04-11T17:14:01.295-04:002011-04-11T17:14:01.295-04:00third stanza is my favorite...like the tramps/lady...third stanza is my favorite...like the tramps/lady word juxaposition.<br /><br />more great work, reneLancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02421199592104616785noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-77623551259418334202011-04-11T16:33:55.991-04:002011-04-11T16:33:55.991-04:00You will end up giving the shroud to the homeless ...You will end up giving the shroud to the homeless guy. Just one of a thousand reasons why I love you.Fred Millerhttp://thefredeffect.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-49500413732655561192011-04-11T09:50:39.083-04:002011-04-11T09:50:39.083-04:00"ahhh but that's just my imagination
runn..."ahhh but that's just my imagination<br />running with scissors again..."<br /><br />Awesome. Enough said.dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-12304525974706464012011-04-11T06:37:54.753-04:002011-04-11T06:37:54.753-04:00What Brian and Ian said! Wow. Powerful all aroun...What Brian and Ian said! Wow. Powerful all around, you really upped the ante with this one.<br /><br />and my word veri is 'wedbond'. Huh.Irish Gumbohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07386134334156997186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-3391015980192524352011-04-11T02:46:22.728-04:002011-04-11T02:46:22.728-04:00the fourth stanza does it for me. this poem packs ...the fourth stanza does it for me. this poem packs a wallop!ianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01545987139627439257noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3298264586056295437.post-17347797112485020512011-04-10T23:01:02.812-04:002011-04-10T23:01:02.812-04:00rene this is awesome...love the second stanza real...rene this is awesome...love the second stanza really kicks it up...ugh what a life...and those dolls the way they talk...they see everything you know...those glassy eyes...scary things...smiles.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com